Review – All That We See or Seem

All That We See Or Seem

by Tempest C. Avery

from goodreads.com Read it and Reap program

This book takes place in Bevain (faery) but the people who have landed there are from the human realm.  It was a little confusing because it opens with four 16 years olds who have just woken up after being transported to Bevain.  They were reincarnated on earth after a lifetime in Bevain because they still have a prophesy to complete.  But the person who brought them is gone, they don’t recognize their surroundings, and they don’t fully remember their previous lives but are slowly remembering things as the book starts.  I think the transport must have happened in the prequel which I didn’t read.  But these guys are coming to and wondering where they are.  So there is a lot of information that has to come across quickly about what is going on, why, when, where, who etc.

So, the characters are interesting.  The language is clunky and needs some cleaning, but the bones are there.  There are The Four who have come back to dethrone the evil king and fulfill a prophesy.  The evil king has the hots for Lily, the leader of the four.  He is the reason they were killed and reincarnated on earth 300 years later (the second half of the book says 100 years).  The people of Bevain are exhausted and ready to rebel and get rid of this guy.  But the kids work hard to get back with the program, lead the rebellion, get their magic online and remember everything, no small task.

Unfortunately, this book was not scrubbed, edited or reviewed for typos.  Because I don’t think anyone looked at this story very critically before publication I was made me crazy for a while and constantly removed from the action.  There are errors galore.  Spellcheck was used, but fury is “furry” and “there” vs “their”, “too” vs “to” among many others disrupted my reading flow.  They were checking the dead after a battle and they were counting the “diseased”.  People were sick?!  WTF?  Oh, I then realized it should have been deceased.  It really threw me and then cracked me up – wrong reaction for that particular scene really.

Ok, I had to get that off my chest.  I haven’t read a “published” book like that before.  I really wanted to take a red pencil to it all. 

I did really like that the bad guy is a blond, not stereotypically dark haired…and he wore skinny jeans in one of his appearances.  So…the evil king is hip.  The story ends at a break in the action, but there will be a sequel.

The story is interesting and has a lot of potential, but in my opinion, this book is not yet all it should be to be considered published and saleable.  Though I think it has a beautiful cover, I really like the sepia.

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8 Responses to Review – All That We See or Seem

  1. Really great review. Authors need to edit for sure before they publish self published authors in particular. Big 6, small press etc. even after edits by half a dozen people mistakes are still there. It happens but one of the issues many have with self published and why they refuse to read is because of a lack of editing. Sounds like this could be a winner though once that’s done.

    • ocdreader says:

      Thanks Jess – I hadn’t run into any issues with self-pub, just the normal typo here and there like you find in any book – was shocking to me how many there were here, but she has good bones…hopefully it will be updated before too long!

  2. Nutschell says:

    The story sounds intriguing, but you’re right about books needing to be edited and scrubbed before they’re set out there.

    Nutschell
    http://www.thewritingnut.com

  3. diannegray says:

    Good work, Elisa. I’m wondering if you let the author know the book needs some work or if they’ll just read your review on Goodread and go ‘oops!?’

    It’s far more than typos by the sound of it – the 300 to 100 years would be very confusing for me 😀

    • ocdreader says:

      I read some other reviews and I am not alone, soooo, I am assuming (which is not always the wisest thing) that she knows…Hopefully she cares and will make some changes!

  4. Awww, that’s too bad. it sounds like a great concept. But when it’s riddled with errors and with it being confusing in the beginning, I just can’t see many people getting into this book. Oh well. Happy you enjoyed some of it.

    • ocdreader says:

      I should probably put publication date so in case it does get updated this review will go with the older date!
      Yeah, I wouldn’t recommend it right now…maybe in the future though 🙂

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